Writing

For my writing  goals I am doing punctuation so I can get better at my full stops,explanation marks and more.
Punctuation is a writers toll(tool) for the reader to know how to read the story.
Some thing that challenged me is speech marks because I never get them in the right place and I forget to use them but anyway here is my story.

Crunch crunch crunch brr. A wave of frost pored over me. I heard a yelp. It came from the pond. a teardrop rolled down my face and hit the white icy grass. In the distance a big slobbery and fury animal  was roaming down the street. slowly I walked towards it. It had golden fur and it had blood dripping down the dog's mouth it had eaten something fury. It was a golden pitbull. That night I could not sleep I was thinking about the baby rabbits that I hid in the big hollow tree outside my house.

The next day I went to the big hollow tree and palled out the baby rabbits and haled them up in my hands.

“Mum mum” “what” “can we keep the rabbits” “ok”  mum got me a cage and  we sat on the bed watching the baby rabbits sleep.  “Thanks for diner it was delicious. Plod plod plod I slowly walked down the hallway. Creek I slowly opened the door there they were staring at me as if they were waiting for me. 

My other goal is adding detail. We use detail so the reader gets a pitcher in there head of what is going on in the story. I am proud they I tried to  put detail in my story. Here are some example of where I have added in detail;
a teardrop rolled down my face and hit the white icy grass.
big hollow tree.
In the distance a big slobbery and fury animal  was roaming down the street.
the best part of my writing is Plod plod plod I slowly walked down the hallway.